Voted For: oreo

okay... didn't really like either of your stories... Work on that... that's the key to being a good topical head.

v/ Oreo... only reason that separated you two I thought was oreo's multi-end rhymes... and that was sparingly... Parrallel... sometimes your lines didn't even rhyme. How ever Parrallel you did do good on structure... but structure doesn't win battles. Very little imagery... the only imagry I got was in Oreo's anyways... metaphors... not much usage.

Straight forward. If you two want to be any good at topicals you gotta start using a hell of a lot better metas and start rhymin' better and use imagry better. And for christ sake's get some good stories. Horrible battle... expected a lot better out of both of you and you both dissapointed. Go back to Word pad or whatever you use and start writin' and elevate more... cuz fuckin' Nemises could have beaten you with y'all using those verses.

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