Overall:
Very good piece. It flowed nice. I felt the whole vibe of it. The topic was cool and you went in-depth about it, so that helped. Vocabulary was awesome and helped the imagery.

Flow:
The flow was pearl. Definantly was a big plus for this piece. You stayed on piont and didnt fall off with it. Syllables went well together. Good job.

Imagery:
Imagery was very good in this piece. I felt the struggle that you were expressing. Vocabulary really brought out the imagery in your piece. So great job on the imagery.

Rhyme Scheme:
Another big focus of this piece I liked. The rhyming and multi's really flowed well together which is tough to do. You made it all make sense with your multi's instead of just forcing them. Awesome rhyming in this piece.

Great piece. Felt it all the way through. Hit up the link in my sig. Thanks, peace.

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