i feel you have good imagery, but you really lack emotion.....great imagery, but yeah, plus i thought your approach was basic, did nothing special with it, and you repeated rebirth like 4 times, and that shouldn't happen......but not bad, topic isn't that flexible, i shall up this for you though.....given, i thought most of your lines were stretched, kinda forced, not your best i dont think, but again, topic was kinda dumb.....keep up, both of you

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