Thread: Crime of Mouth
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Old 04-06-05, 12:56 AM   #2
Dabatos
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Listening to it right now.. oh shyt.. lmao.. I got this beat and bout to make a christian song with it.... hahaha.. lol.. your voice is funny man.. sounds like you can't really open your mouth much.. lol the verse is okay. but too simple.. lol your chorus is okay.. lol "You ain't talking bout pringles?" lol funny line.. the second verse is too simple once again.. if you use simple rhymes then try to make it creative.. the chorus isn't creative.. not catchy at all.. only very little.. and 3rd verse is the same.. damn dude now i don't wanna use this beat nemore lol..

7/10..

plz leave feed on my song..

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