Voted For: Unregistered

Lawless (Hs)

to hell-wit-this-trick... L-be-the-shit/
I'm bout to break this bitch like a elderly hip/
^second line's good, bleh @ first

no named no fame.... so I might as well remove-his-print/
I got a 9 that will slap this hoe like an abusive pimp/
^okay okay

I grab the switchblade.... jus in case I need to slice em/
I'll shatter ya ribcage.... u know I'm untouchable like a museum items/
^bit self-glorification so nah...


after I'm done.. hell spit lawless shit for 3 days/
cause he knows his flow was truly artificially made/
^nice bar

I got the 45 pattin' em on the back like he's un~able to belch/
Rv think you got 'imaginary friends' cause you always 'play wit yaself'/
^haha, dope closer

Okay verse, the best line in my opinion was your closer, actually laughed when I read that. Had some good punches in there, no real personals though and I don't really like all the talk about guns, bit self-glorifying. Had your flow on lock, found good balance in your vocab and structure was cool. Just try to get some more personals and creativity.


Unregistered

Repping 50 in ya signature like a muthafuckin disgrace
You’ve been misplaced G-unit dot COM is this way ------>
^lolz, nice opener

You dumb shit, I’ll son you worse than your mom did
Your brains more empty than eminems gun clip
^good one

I’ll leave you looking small like 50 without the steroids
Ya whole crews like Michael Jackson’s children… scared boys
^lmao,funny shit

You’re wack as fuck so read my verse and take notes
The only ways you’ll ever get a win is no shows and hate votes
^decent bar

This battle is too simple plus this guys a queer
When confronted with beef he runs faster than diarrhoea
^cool closer

Good verse! Had funny personals in there combined with nice punches, was also feeling your flow. The vocab was just fine as well as the structure but I feel sometimes you had a filler line in there. Try to be consistent throughout the entire verse with the mad personals and you're gonna be top cat in no time. Enjoyed reading your shit

My vote goes to Unregistered, purely based on the personals...no hate...

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