Voted For: Given Light

Decent topical battle.

Given Light:
Aight, I think your rely on your vocab a little too much. The vocab really didn't mix well into your verse in the beginning, but it got better a bit in. Your storyline is average and not that original. Flow is good, however. You don't seem to have a lot of emotion in this, just doesn't hit me hard. Structure is fine. Your wording could be better, (hurled line) felt forced. Overall I think you need to work on twisting the subject a little more and try to throw some more multis in there.

Stanza:
The letter idea was ok, but not completely original. Your vocab was decent, mixed well in some places. I think this would have been better if you had made it a bit longer as well. Your flow fell off in too many spots, and it was noticable. Work on keeping your wording work with the beat (flow) you have going. Your emotion was decent, but started to fall off halfway through.

Overall, decent battle, but neither one of you impressed me with your stories, vocab, or imagery.

v/Given Light

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