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leave you rest'n pz's
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IP:
aight your biggest downfall in my opinion is your VOCABULARY.
dont use you/you/you/do/do/you/.....its very annoyin for readers.
i got ya story line n the point ya were trying to convey...
you lacked on the emotion a bit...but its mainly cause of ya
vocab n lack of descriptional words.....you got the right idea
now just work on producing a imAge to ya reader.....
keep dropping.........pz.....RTF
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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
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fake fucks..move on...!
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