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Old 04-10-05, 12:47 AM   #29
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dab-this wasnt your best effort i could tell, ive been readin your topicals for ever..you couldve done way better then this...(we both know that)you had started off good but just got side tracked n it didnt flow as well as i thought it shouldve..srry....but if ya dont put the effort in ya aint gonna get the win(feel me)...srry fam
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fallll.....this was started off real wack but i kept readin cuz your flow was on n stayed pretty consistent(which was weird conbsidering your poor structure)some of your lines are identical to 2pacs shit...but idk....your protrayed this topic well after the opening first couple bars...seemed like it was a real close topic to you............my advice is fix ya structure 4 next tyme...watch your quotable lines and dont repeat bars like a chorus..its a topical...not a song ..but overall i think you wrote the topic better..........
infallible....RTF IN MY SIG..........
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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
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fake fucks..move on...!