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Old 04-10-05, 04:22 PM   #22
The Black Plague
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Voted For: Bonecollector

Easy decision here.. Collector easily takes this one...

K-Trini- You have some potential man, but u need some elevation.. Ya lines were stretched, and at times you tried fittin 3 lines in a bar, which dont work...You had some nice lines tho still, like the Basketball line and the dictionary line.. shit was decent.. I didn't understand the Remote control line.. like i said you came decent at best, some way stretched barz and jus amateur wordplay and complexity.. come wit more personals too...

Bonecollector- Nice verse from you... more than enuff to take the win.. Opener was nice, but ya second line killed Trini's whole verse.. lol nice shit... You stayed consistent after that, with the sour gum line, and ya closer was nice too... Ya 2nd line in ya opener was kinda self-glorification, but it didn't take away from your verse... you had nice wordplay and real nice punches, wit nice struc and flow throughout...

Overall, Colector takes this shit wit better and harder hitten punches, and just a harder hittin verse... Trinin try to elevate with more complexity and personals in your verse, cuz u got some potential...

V/Bonecollector
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