Voted For: diman

aight,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,easy-peasy

metaphor
>leave shells in diman,like his moms when they got taco night/
you aint eatin me in battle kid, im pretty tough to bite/
^aight set up....2nd line was bunk 3/10
>you's a whack nigga only time you was diman/
is when you agreed to drink your brothers semen/
^do demons drink their brothers semen regularly? 3/10
>see man im to nasty for you, like black jellybeans/
raps not in u like a nigga wearing wrangler,its not your genes/
horrible structure, and what if he likes black jellybeans? 2/10
>u whack head and shoulders,the only time u win by a hair/
so respon if u dare/
decent set up....you coulda at least maybe a better threat 3/10

overall: 11/40....uh, you need to elevate everything, find out what a decent punch is, use REAL personals if you can, dont self glorify....work a whole crap load on structure, flow was okay....vocab was hella basic along with wordplay....so, elevate

diman
>meta udilizing a W, is like Soc favorin skriptz.
thinkin his words are weapons, yea like 50 with paper clips.
decent 6/10
>its not nature its...emabarrassing, that sig of yours.
i feel like its english class. lesson one, tackle the metaphor.
haha, decent 7/10
>its been said before, but i truely will take this quickly.
ya like a graphic battle, ya drop ya best & still wont diss me.
HAHA, this one had me LOL'ing, 8/10
>i feel like debo, for no reason i wanna inflict a beating.
a battle with meta?... homework sounds more intriguing.
not bad again, laughed a little 7/10
>ya not clearly thinking, like a spur of the moment wife.
im mean shit, how gangsta is naming yaself after a poetic device?
haha, solid closer...good shit 7/10

overall: 35/50....not a bad verse diman, keep up, you had some pretty witty/clever punches and it seems like you are on the right track/have a hang of text battling....you could improve on structure thought, and use personals....word, keep up yo, solid verse all round, hit me up sometime if you want

v/diman

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