Voted For: Effect
Effects Verse
mutha fucker my deadly verse will smash your ass to little peices
everyone knows im sick kid you should really start praying for jesus
^ Everyone knows your sick?...u gotta prove it...this opener = Self-G NO
you fuckin penis steppin up to me i can say you def have the ballz
but when ya got into this battle you know dat u bitch is gonna fall!
^ Meh...no punch 1st line a lil SG too basic not hard hittng
ya must think ya biggy smalls your to damn played a bitch ass made
ya to soft to beat me better start digging a grave wid ur mummas spade
^ rhyming aight...punch meh Biggie reference hmm...meh better then the 1st 2
this fat bitch is bigger den sunamie tidal waves shit your just deprived
why the hell are you alive if you were dieing nobody would av ya revived
^ better punch this time Tsunami shit though i thinks too soon
cuz you are damn wirthless what the hell is your fucking perpous
if you were famous dumass I think you would turn hip hop into a circous
^ Aight again rhymin aight this prolly best so far
ha kiss the crack on my ass and I burn through your fuckin ass
can't wait till your burned ur family will be disturbed when im chuckin ash
^ Diss aight but boo @ the kiss the crack of ya ass reference...sounds homo
i'll give your ass fear you must think your as good as shakespear
i'll lodge spears in ya back and when you scream im'a rip of your ears
^ Rhyming aight but connection was flawed...ears ref woulda been suited better for Van Gough
why don't ya end yourself cuz im already destroying ya health
don't ever judge me cuz my flow will lyrically strangle ya self
^ SG...NO
see you in hell bitch you can't rhyme fuck you and snort glue sticks
I take pleasure it slappin dip sticks n stabbin my dick into his gfs clit
^ Flow messed up here diss meh...not feelin this one
don't even spit I bet your prob gonna prewrite your not gettin anywhere
you can't get back on track when i snap ya back no one would care
^ Flow fell off here too this bar sounds like this one
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Originally Posted by Effect
this fat bitch is bigger den sunamie tidal waves shit your just deprived
why the hell are you alive if you were dieing nobody would av ya revived
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IMO anyway seems repetative
im leaving you in dispair my multies got ya ass cimbing trees
your skill has been killed so will you go hang ur self please
^ No diss jus sayin u dope he's not meh
this fuckin fake ass prevokin bitch ass i'll leave you chokin
ive had enough of makin ya shakin im leavin ya blood sokin
^Closer...2nd line no diss more concentrated on rhyming um...no diss really it's jus what you claim to have done
Overall
Good in few parts Effects verse had aight flow which fell off in parts not many strong disses 0% personals...still need improving dawg but ya showing it now at least a lil
Lyrical Mages' Verse
yo this man probably sweatin cause i gave him half an hour.
hes sweatin like a dansel in distress in a fucking tower
^ No...you need to come fresher than that dawg
i dont to use a spell just blast you with my tech
this man doesnt have tyme fo his skills to come in full effect.
^ Name flip but bar was meh...
i levitate him up them i drop him down.
123 hes done and its not even the final round.
^ LOL played man no no no
you already done or are you ready for more
cause theres no way in hell youll stop this god of war.
^ No diss no punch...meh closer
Overall
Still got a lot to learn...battles ain't gangsta rap...learn off the readings off some more known people up in here to get an understanding how text battles work
V/Effect...but this wasn't a winning verse...jus took advantage of a newb...get better.