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Voted For: .K.onfliktz
meh, i liked kons better
slodk....first off, you stretched every line, and thats bad....i thought your first bar was your best, and then the rest you kinda just played off parts with his name, which wasnt that effective, and your last bar was played, and its not that clever when you have part of his name in, too played to be effective...the multi tourny one had potential to be a good personal, but you had no set up....but at least your not putting " " around everything, so just fix up your structure and stay consistent with your punches, cause first line was gold
kon, nothing too special, but i think you stayed consistent more, and it flowed nicer, way better to read, the shatter your bones line, that was tight man, punch was pretty meh, but still that was dope, haha, so, i think you got this due to way better structure/flow, and consistency, and didn't have and played shit really, so, yeah, word, keep up man
v/kon
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