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Originally Posted by Flow Intelligent
oh fine daz... the line about me was sick the rest was wack> is that betteR?
work on your structure and your rhyme scheme is fucked up... i dont like how you break one line into 2 lines just so people dont say you stretched the bar... everything kinda dragged on you should have made the beginning the best part... then you would have caught everyone attention... decent wordplay and some solid punches
6.5/10
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yes that was sooooooooooooooooooooo much better..........
its just if you dont give feed how do you expect people to elevate
or know what the reader wasnt feeling bout the piece.....
i appreciate you takin the time flow..(even if it wasnt my piece)
