Voted For: warrior

warrior

i tend~to~win~fights, take a stab im bendin~ya~knife/
u like a fallin soldier, the way "war's" endin~ya~life/
^^^DECENT OPENER
u either brave or stupid, most herbs would refuse~to~respond/
im shittin on shell's, i guess u could say im usin~the~'jon'/
^^^HAHAHAHA IM LOVIN DAT LINE VERY TYTE LINE
RV's losin a pawn, yall eggin him on, im X'ing~him~out/
cause im the type to waste shell's like im eggin~ya~house/
^^^IIGHT
more wordplay on ya name then u got in ya whole~weak~verse/
im gon be the winner(winter) so im endin ya career like u sold~T-shirts/
^^^PRETTY NICE LINE
i take it easy on herbs to give em hope/
leavin "jon" dead like this kids the pope/
bitch im dope, u better pray to God u get a vote/
^^^AVERAGE CLOSURE

warrior- i liked ur verse, there were lotz of punches and personals, the closure with three lines wasnt that great, u shud've stuck to the two lines to close it, i can tell u elevated

BEST LINE- u either brave or stupid, most herbs would refuse~to~respond/
im shittin on shell's, i guess u could say im usin~the~'jon'/
HA HA HA HA HA MY FAVORITE LINE OF UR VERSE
9/10


jon shellls

Let’s get straight to the point don’t got time to water ya./
Just exposing fake thugs, in his case a fake Warrior./ (1)
^^^MEH... IIGHT
Hard on the outside, inside soft like and Oreo./
He tried out for The Top Model show, he showed me his Portfolio./ (2)
^^^ANOTHA....MEH
And who ever gased him, over charged him./
Now he’s hungry for a win, Shells gon over starve him./ (3)
^^^O.K
Ya secret is you wanna be a singer, but you settle for rapping./
You wanna tell ya crew but don’t know what would happen./
^^^NOT REALLY FEELIN IT

I’m hot dog, you still trying to Catch up./
Shells Hot Dog leave ya shirt red like Ketchup./ (5)
^^^ATTEMPTED PUNCH PRETTY GOOD
Shells Backed up by Steel Heaters./
I’ma turn ya “Warriors” to my personal Cheerleader’s./ (6)
^^^PRETTY GOOD
The New Guy of the Mafia, the Kid Next./
Selling Weed the same color of a Piss Test./ (7)
^^^IIGHT
Shot you in the leg, make ya bitch drink my piss test./
Throw ya bitch on you so ya’ll can get a little kiss test./ (8)
^^^MEH CLOSURE


jon shells- not really feelin ur vers homie. since we fam ima tell u like dis, elevate sum more, come up wit more lyrical word choice, work on ur diction. ur punches were weak so work on those and u b str8
6.5/10

cant vote b/c we crew

if i cud vote
MY V/WARRIOR

cud u please rtf on mah battle vs. Showtime(link in sig)
itz been open 4eva n ppl aint votin
please holla back wit good feedback and a vote 4 da betta battler
HOLLA!

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