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Wow, this was a nice drop..
You had lots of emotions,..and nice feeling
you used nice wordplay, and good vocab..
nice imagery.... you really made the reader want to read more and more..
your structure was the only thing, it was like a heart beat... try to match up
your bars, and you would have gotten a higher school... but overall it was a very good drop... just elevate on your structure .... keep it up! 
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