Oooo talking about decent flow. Shit was nice, good vocab. Nice emotion, the imaginary should be Upp a little, put some more details in your verse. You saying you write "poetry" Thats cool, cause i felt the emotion off this verse, upp it a little. Multi'z in this verse was good. The rhyme scheme is totally different, liking your style.
ONe leave feedback in my O.M "Love story" Please RTF