First thing I noticed is ya muffled quality....sounds like u hiss reduced too much or prolly used a dynamic processor.....your eqing needs serious tweaking to get clairity in ya drops.....ya flow seems forced...instead of flowing naturally your trying to hit the snare....on every rhyme word ya vocie slightly "jumps"...cuz your timing ya lines instead of jus flowing naturally...your deliver isn't horrible its improving..u def. aiing to be a laid-back emcee which is cool u jus got learn how to flucuate ya voice better...make more drastic changes in your tone an the whole demeanor of ya voice while u flowing...lyrically this was dissapointing due to text drops I read of yours...ya rhyme scheme stayed the same thru most of track..lol at u mentioning one of ya few multies....try using mulite syllable rhymes....laid back emcees usually use those to seem more lively...it force u to change the pitch of ya voice naturally..then jus dub'em an u good......anyways hope this helps.....1

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