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Old 04-16-05, 12:51 PM   #9
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Rhymes Scary..Ya Hairs Stand Up Like An Electro-Shocked Chewbacca…
Give Ya Time To Elevate..But Instead Of Getting Better U Grew-Wacker…
not a bad opener 6
Bitch Tryin To Sneak Away..Solo Got Kesse Steppin Silent Like Ninja Boots…*
Trace Ya Wackness..U Plant Seeds In Ya Lines To Find Ya Lyrical Roots…
nice punch i like the set-up 8
True Kesse Ain’t A Crack Pot..Got Ya Shit Shattered Like Bricks-Thru-Glass…
Words Bounce Off..Can’t Fully Penetrate Like When Your Dick-Screws-Ass…
i thought this sounded extra gay, the first half was fine.. 5
Kesse Got Me Worried..This Man Comin At Me Feminine Like Drag-Queenz…
Get Fucked By Blades..I’ll Have Blood Spillin All Cut Up Like Stab-Scenes…
perfect set-up nice punch at the end.. 8
“Kesse Defeats Solo”..Yea Right Bitch, The Concept Of That’s Outrageous…
But U Really Are ILL..Ure Lines Make Me Barf, The Shit Must Be Contagious…
aight closer... 6
You had sum nice bars, Solo.. you had really good set-ups at times but then some of your punches were weak for the perfect set up, you should re-word the Bricks-Thru-Glass line cuz the second half didn't sound right with "dicks-screws-ass" i thought that was ehh = /... and your opener and closer should start/end off better than it did.. but overall nice verse.. 33/50

king is short on rhymes, checkin the bank trying to get some pre-loans
thinning your name down to 'solo', already know youve been de-throwned
^nice opener 7
see holmes, your on a shopping spree, the way youre getting shot n mauled
against the wall, kick you in the nuts, but i still aint playing football
^i dun like the set up, it formed a weak punch^ 5
im gonna make you bleed you bitch..........so go get your fuckin' rag on
because i'm smoking you.........just like jakie did puff the magic dragon
^LOL ha nice bar^ 7
skills your laggin, you know you are a herb, when your the 'king' planter
i suggest va'moose', cause ill tear you apart, like im a diss some antler (dismantlers)
^dun try to make trapped wordplay... but the punch was aight.^ 6
you know that when you compare me to you, i come out as just far more
you know you are shitty, cause the only props you gettin is from star wars
lol nice closer ^7

Your verse seemed rushed and it was stretched at some points, but you had a few aight punches and name play.. but i feel you didn't come too hard, but i like the way you flipped some of his concepts around tho, it is very creative.. 32/50

From the looks of this, Solo took it, it coulda been easily given to Kesse.. but stay up kids..

v/ Solo
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