Thread: Dying struggles
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Old 04-17-05, 01:00 PM   #2
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I enjoyed this piece, read it several times in fact. The concept you used here is interesting, I like how you worked it out. Found a great balance in your vocab: the reader understands everything and yet doesn't get the feeling that it's too basic. The strongest aspect was the imagery, I could really picture the wind, the rustle of the leaves, I could imagine the entire scene you portrayed. The emotion was strong as well, not always present on the surface but if you read it a few times, it's more obvious.

Nice drop!

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