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Originally Posted by Bonecollector

Stop exsesivly freeposting!...
This was a decent peice..
You used alot of emotions... good feeling ...
Your structure was off, and you really need to work on how you line up your barz..
Imagery was good , you really made the reader want to keep reading..
overall this was a decent drop.. alittle long , but it was really good,
next time try to elevate on wordplay ,vocabulary, and structure
Nice peice , keep it up , and hope to see more work from you in the future

(LoL) just figured like, if people saw alot of replys they would read it.
Thank You for the honest feed-back.
Well, can you show me what you would of changed differnt. How can I step up on somethin' when Im doing my best? I felt this was a great drop. Like, my structure.. if you use word it comes out just fine.

Well, uppin for feed back.. (and ty for the honesty)
Sweft

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