word word word...short but powerful....great concept idea, loving it....touched on it nicely, vocab made it really interesting to read, like, i was pretty much hooked on it.....but i dont think i would have liked it longer, because you got the message across perfectly....obviously because you know what you are doing......anywho, great piece

Am I suppose to gaze with amazed eyes lost in confusion
Until the fusion of man is lost when each rib becomes loosened
Deal with pain and the formulated functions will then turn
Even babies will learn or at least develop calices to protect against burns
Look every tugboat has its day then will sink and wilt for ages
As people skim your life's story skipping the whole 200 pages
But please fill me in why you'd melt like the wicked witch stepped in the rain
Oh! I see you don’t want to deal with any of God's pain

^ loving those lines......word, keep dropping more....and i will leave feed...haha, pc

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