Voted For: BkBrawla

aiight lemme break shit down.....

BK: Ya verse was aiight but... yu need to even ya lines out a bit more, even if they are stretched if they are all the same or close to the same it will be easier to keep track of the flow. and try to make sure your lines ryhme if u are going to use a AA-BB format. cuz that will fuck up the bar all together. also try to incorporate a more complex rhyme scheme. throw sum internal rhymes and multis in there... work on ya wording as well. u had sum good concepts that could've been great punches. work on ya nameplays/personals. i didnt see any nameplays but they definately couldve been used. and the personals that i saw werent that hard.... i think thats it

Prez:u had sum decent punches. but sum played concepts as well. u know how to structure a punch but just havent showed a lot of creativity. work on that. think outside the box. u could use a more complex rhyme scheme as well. also up your vocab. u dont need to use huge words or nothin, just get out of the elementary zone. ya metas coud use sum work as well as ya personals. not sure if u used any I couldnt tell. not much else. if u want to work on ya skills hit me up on aim and i'll help ya out

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