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Old 04-21-05, 12:35 PM   #11
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efecx

u cant make it rappin so u create a rapper n call it the apprentice
thats wat u are in rappin your still learnin how to write a sentence
^hehe good opener...

u can go and drink coffee wit other people i murdered at central merk
every1 is talkin bout reincarnation and u talk about your first birth
^lolz nice nice

u see how smart he is on biography he says he is a rapper in the makin
ure battle record is now 0-0 but the record of 0-1 is in the creation
^coo bar

i checked and see you got beaten by people called tommy guns and effect
u can add a new name 2 that list wit a note sayin i got merked by efecx
^uhm decent I guess, no punch though

people critize your work and say improve and your record will recoupe
so u take it to go work on your wordplay so u go and make alphabet soup
^funny closer

Good verse with nice consistent punches, some cool personals and I was also feeling your flow. The vocab was nice, found excellent balance between basic and complex, structure was cool as well. Solid drop!

lyrical mage

sticks an stones will break yo bones an words will always hurt you.
but since you facing a magician in my vision they about to merk you.
^bit self-glorification and I don't really get the opener...

you beating me will never happen like jack da ripper doing jail time.
ill probably be punished if i get beat by nigga wit lame rhymes
^nice bar hehe

you was probably sittin down writing rhymes cause you almost
answered too late.
and when i beat you wit your written rhymes your excuse will be im trying to elevate
^okay okay

you knew you wouldnt fit in rv so you put an x at the end of your name to look cool
but if yo rhymes aint good yo name lookin like a damn fool.
^haha funny closer

Okay verse with some good punches, decent personals but I felt they weren't as hardhitting as those from efecx. Structure was good as well as vocab but I wasn't always feeling you flow. Had some funny stuff in there though but try to be bit more consistent next time, no hate whatsoever...

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