I'll try to ignore the quality...Anyway, beat is decent...But that really doesnt matter...Your lyrics were good...The image you potrayed was good...this sounds like one of those old commercials where they spit a poem about perfume or some shit...lol...The topic is ehhh, maybe try something different next time...because these kind of topics are very overdone...and next time try to put more emotion into some parts of the poem to catch your listeners attetion more...because this started to get real repititive quick...but you did good on this nonetheless...keep at it...good drop...
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