OK ELEMENATAL GOOD DROP HERE VOCAB AND IMAGERY WISE BUT EMOTION WAS MISSING LIKE CRAZY AND YOUR DISCRIPTIVE CREATIVITY IS WEAK MAKING FOR A BLAND POEM IT WAS BORING AND SEEMED AS IF IT WAS JUST A STORY POETRY IS TO BE SO MUCH MORE EMOTION AND METAPHORES THROWN INTO POWERFULL DROPS THIS FAILED TO GAIN MY ATTENTION AT ALL IT WAS AS I SAID BASICALLY VERY WEAK IN A EMOTION ASPECT AND WASNT GIVING ME A VIVID ENOUGH PICTURE WHILE HELLFIRE YOU HAD GOOD EMOTION AND GOOD IMAGERY HERE MAKING FOR QUITE A DECENT POEM THAT BROUGHT THE READER IN.THE METAS HELPED YOU ALONG SUCH AS devil blaze over with a skate halls dance
WHICH WAS GOOD AS WELL AS MANY OTHER LINES SO TO ME HELLFIRE WON WITH BETTER EMOTION AND VISUAL ASPECTS.
VOTE-HELLFIRE

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