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This was an okay drop,
It really lacked acouple things...
Mostly it lacked that you didnt have a constant structure...
It through the reader off , and it didnt want the reader wanna read it ..
Second wordplay , and vocab were blah, they werent very creative...
Nothing really stuck out ..
Keep it up , it was an average peice... think you could have done alot, better
but keep at it , hope to see anyother drop from you soon
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