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Ya mom massages my nuts
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hmmmmm...actually this was pretty good...it had a nice story line but the imagery was weak...y'all didn't describe the stories well...if it wasn't for the beginning narraction I wouldn't know what was going on....y'all had some decent vocab here an there indeph had the strong vocab...it flowed nicely tho<---seemed to be y'all focus, instead of story develop...I woulda tolerated flow being a lil off if y'all told a stronger story but I liked th eidea jus it lacked the proper storyline develop...stay up.......1
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Haters spend all they time hating on another's life
Then wonder why when presenting there's to others...no one looks twice
Because at the end of the day, you get what you give
So, when you consumed with his...don't get mad when everyone else is
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