Voted For: Daubs

BLACK~MAGIK

I'ma crush this kid, gangsta? Please, you're nothing bitch!
I'm "so hot like stove tops" you "couldn't touch me with oven mits"
^bit of self-glorification but aight opener

I'm grippin' the iron, the trey'll speak, make this faker cease
Then watch this hater "sink" like a "kitchen appliance"
rhyming doesn't work so well in my opinion, no real punch

This man's game's hollow, and it can't stop me dawg
But I will "pop your top" like a "champagne bottle!"
dawg-bottle?nah..no punch again..

You a lame emcee, know better than to play with me
Because ya rhymes "don't make cents" like "broken change machines
^okay closer

Aight, you need to work on some stuff in fact because you didn't really have any hardhitting punches or personals. Got nice wordplay though and your vocab was good as well but some of those rhyming words just didn't work. Structure was good and flow was decent, just fix those rhymes and up your punches, no hate man...


Daubs


Called me out in my own thread,but only if "im not scared"??..*
Bitch you gonna get it now,cuz like the SAS,im always prepared!!
^hehe, nice opener

Ima "shatter" your record, like a brick through glass..**
Called me out like a gansta, but still show no class!!
^good, no real punch though

My punches hit you full in the face, yours barely connect..***
Takes more than battlin 5 newbies......to gain my respect!!
^okay , bit self-glorification but its cool

Your magik like a magician so u make me see things..****
That jus fake shit, kinda like the skill you bring!!
^funny closer

Good verse right here, had some nice punches, few good personals and the vocab was aight. Structure was cool too and had your flow on lock. Now get some more creativity in there and you're set but this was good verse, enjoyable to read and it beat the other cat for sure because you had better and more hardhitting punches!

Please RTF, link's in my sig...

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