meh, okay piece here....didn't like the ending, quite frankly i didn't think it fit the piece very well, kinda took away from the seriousness of it.....anyways, i think some sentances were a little choppy, takin to much breaks, but other than that, real good imagery, nice descriptive sentances, good vocab....it was a decent piece.....keep up

/definately not best open mic of april material

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