Thread: Valor vs l i n e .
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Old 04-27-05, 02:55 PM   #10
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From: Barrie
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Originally Posted by Mr. Dope to you
Voted For: Valor

LINE WHAT DID YOU DO??
Your peice was killer right up untill the last few lines..!!

I read yours second and I was really feeling the waking up in a cemetary after you die theme, it was dope.. But then right at the end you didnt pull together a good conclusion for your peice, it sort of lost it.. -----_____--------

Peace.


You obviously didn't understand the ending but meh... the whole story was based in a dream, hence the reason for all the fucked up things happening, then the conclusion was waking up and seeing he has nothing ahhwell

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