Ending this crew battle, LL aint winnin against EF,
LFS is taking over, I could beat ya crew by myself,
Well, That didnt rhyme. I would work on your opener too...

Comin out swingin harder than the last time you dissed me,
Only way you can talk crap is if I shit in ya Rice Krispies,
That was what you call an incomplete punch. It prolly sounded good to you, but it wasnt a good punch at all. Made no sense to me.

Before this battle shoulda stopped at Ca$per to raise up to me,
I don't bother readin ya verses they got natrual viscosity,**
Ok vocab here, but RV is dumb..lol

How you gon be a livin legend when died wit no legacy,
I rearranged the language by makin LFS the Great a G,
Ight, now it just seems like you rhyming.

LL ran from the Finest like bitches but TG got his merrymen,
Ya crew is full of spinoffs, yall some wanna be Emericans,***
I see you trying. This line was ight. Just not worded all that.

Bitch you're skills is fake like hoodrats rockin Mi-No-Nos,
But I got good news, I saved some money by switching to GEICO,
LOL. WTF? This made no sense? How is this a diss? This couldve been worded way better...
We can throw down RV money for this battle, and I'll be saving money like Geico
something like that. This couldve easily been made into a diss

Cuz this battle is done, but I'll end on a positive note,
Kids don't be like Ma$taminad and go and get ya feelings hurt
Ehh...Not all that good. Try more of dissing you oponent and less of dissing his crew members next timep

I think you are on the right track with this battle, but I don't think you quite there yet. You had chances to have some dope punches, it's just the way you word them. Work on dissing your oponent. Your structure is the least of your worries, you need some good mettas, punches, and personals in this to take some easy wins. Just work on that. You got potential though, I just don't think you took this one, that's honest. If you were in LL, we could give you pointers, and help you elevate, but....(you know). But, it was a pretty descent verse. Oh, I also felt like you were just rhyming. There was a big lack of punches, and all that other shit people vote for. Work on that. Rhyming is good, but it gota make since. Your battling, start dissing your oponents.

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