^^doesnt kno what structure is if he says its nice^^
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structure is easy readin, lines match up, syllable count
between lines is correct, and does not include the use of s/lashes
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your creativity lacked alot, up ya vocab, its elementric,
i read it all, but it ws a pain in the ass with bad structure
work on gettin better content in your OPEN MICS.......
no hate but i doubt you'll get much feedback cuz of ya structure

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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
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fake fucks..move on...!