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Hm..this was an iight peice..
Structure was good ,
You had some nice wordplay ,and decent vocab
alittle simple but it was okay, ...
Topic was good , Concept was good ..
I felt it could have been alittle better in feeling , and emotions
Maybe elevate your vocab , and wordplay..Try to use better imagery ...
Overall this was an iight peice.. keep it up
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