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Voted For: skriptz
SKAAL
I'm A Bout To Bless This Dude Wit Tight Lines On This Loose~beef
You Aint 'skriptz' You Is Crayon Skribbled On Loose~leaf
^good opener
On Tha World~wide~web But You Aint Known On Two~streets
U Burgaler~turned~fed Like Martin On Blue~streak
^nice bar
Shake Ya Head All You Want Like Shots Don't Go Thru~cheeks
Too~weak At Ya Show They 'walkin Out' Like Slewed~feet
^coo coo
Words Burn Ya Chest This Is 8 Thousand Proof~speech
You'll Need Yao Mixed Wit Shaq And That's Just Half Of My True~reach..............
^okay closer
Overall good verse, had nice wordplay in there for sure and you had your flow as well as structure and vocab on lock. Only thing I'm kinda missing are the hardhitting personals, the punches were okay but not extremly bold, you made up for that with your wordplay though. Just get go for hard personals and keep the hot wordplay up, no hate...
Skriptz
Break your teeth & lets all see who will be the one to get last laugh
He said there’s something up his crack...
.................................................. ....but that’s my foot in his ass
^haha, nice opener
Only words your good at saying is: “I can own your ass you bastard”
But the only thing you’ve really been good at was being a coward
^coo coo
Pick this homo-slob up on his feet, & then knock his ass in the chin
SKAAL’s best line would be when he saw the battle & checked in
hehe, good one
I see you have a couple of punches, but I’m still laughing at you
Cuz I had called some1 wack, but I was actually talking to you
^no no at rhyming with same word but closer was okay
Nice verse with good punches, especially the first bar...made me laugh for sec there, funny shit. Nothing too special though but you got cool punches, not too many personals though. Vocab was good and I was feeling your flow, structure was cool as well. You didn't bring your top game though and yet you win this battle due to more hardhitting punches.
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