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Old 04-30-05, 05:43 PM   #12
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Voted For: AutoMatik

yo on da real ya strukture was terrible it made ya verse seem wakk as shit yo fix dat

u had betta punches n dis verse

openor-automatik he had a aight punch n dat openor
punches-automatik betta punches overall
personals-misk he had betta personals
metas-none
multies-automatik
strukture-misk
wordplay-none
closer-automatik

aight yo automatik took dis he had betta punches he put more effort n 2 hiz verse u gotta fix ya strukture ya shit lookz wakk as hell on da real fix ya strukture n yea cum a lil harder next battle

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