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Old 05-02-05, 03:51 PM   #7
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Voted For: AutoMatik

Verbal

I feel like I'm roughing up a retard, sparring with you...
Kid, you couldn't spit heat at a Mongolian barbeque...
^good opener

Trust me, your frees are ugly and your rhymes can't bust me..
Cuz the verses you spit are full of shit, like Huggies..
^bit played but decent

I doubt you own a gun, but I'm sure that you've 'packed shit'
So I'll cut out this fag's tongue and give him a new accent..
^hehe good one

You're clumsy with weaponry, so don't talk about automatics..
Because I'll shoot up your crib like baby heroin addicts...
^coo coo

I'll stay silent and still merk you...and let the weapons talk for me...
Stick an 'L' in your bloody corpse and leave you with a sense of 'gLory'*
^nice closer

Good verse right here, nice potential in here with funny wordplay, some hardhitting punches, one personal too. Some self-glorification here and there though and you could have been more creative but I have seen far worse, you got some mad potential. Had your flow, vocab and structure on lock. Keep it up!


AutoMatik

Im Smashin This Ass, Torchin Your Names Bashin You Fast......
Nd I'll Take Your 'Shots' With 'Vodka' As If I Was 'Brakin The Glass......
^nice wordplay right here, good opener

Aint Stop When I Blast, Ready To Die Soldier Theif This Win Like Someone Stole Her.....
Nd He Wouldnt Be Able To 'Katch Up' Even If I Put You On My Burger.....
^hehe, cool punch with dope wordplay again

Step In The Ring IM Like Werd Herb, Then Destroy Your Spinal Cowrd.....
Nd Leave Your Chest With A Wider Hole, Then I'll 'Pop Shells, Like Sick Kids With 'Tylonal......
^hehe, funny bar

You Aint 'Standin A Chance' To Win Geek, Like 'I Cut Of Your Legs......
Nd Your Rhymes Weak, Beat Me? Nah, Cus Hes Bragin Over A '3 Battle Win Streak?......
^nice closer

Nice verse, got a dope flow in this one due to the good ass multis you using. Strongest aspect in my opinion was your wordplay which you used to build up and work out some funny hardhitting punches, no real personals though but you made up for that. Structure and vocab was good as well.

My vote goes to AutoMatik because I am really feeling his wordplay and the way he turned it into nice punches, no hate whatsoever to Verbal because you got more potential than half of these new kids man, keep it up for real!
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