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Old 05-03-05, 01:01 PM   #13
.:Jack Rackam:.
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Voted For: DAZZLE

nigga razzle dazzle yo name sounds like a retarded ass cereal//
i bet ya friends r da trix rabit and lucky charms guy but i will steal kill though//
^^what, hell no, this is wack kid.....
u a fuckn ho that cant be lyrical where as ma shit is so magical//
my shit's like a plague and i m gon to fuck u up wit blade while u stil thinkn its a play day//
^^terrible, no punch horrible structure
it stook u long enuff to fuckn check in but now i'm at the end so now gone i'm gone like da wind//
^^gone like the wind, ok meta, but it had no punch..no diss
get me?..this verse was not good at all lil roach, if you wanna win battles youu gotta get more creative with ya bars n try
to make sure you diss him using unplayed concepts....no hate.
i suggest you stop battlin till you elevate.....

Ima batter this bitch, kinda like a chippy batters a fish...
Fuck type you cant even speak to me bitch...ya voice so high pitched!!*
^^decent, highpitch is played but it applys as a personal, so its koo
Tell me not to "start shit"!?! Why? Ya shits "overused" like a "pimps dick"
^^3rd line in a bar throws off your flow, try not to do this
Shit bitch even ya pics been played out...........in 9th degrees sig.**
Even ya threats are unrealistic...like a fat chick with small tits!!

^^closer was not set up correctly, set up 1st, then punch
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overall your opener n consistency in making sense got
you this battle, try more elevated members next time, stay away from 3 line bars, it will help your flow, use set-ups before your punch,
not the other way around.....no hate........
return an honest votein the sig