Rastafari Walk Tall
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Voted For: Drama Queen
Vote : Drama Queen
Diman: your vocab was used flawlessly nothin too complicted and nothing to simplistic, ur structure was shaky but okay, imagery was a bit lacking unlike emotion which poored out...only thing is that this drop was more poetic, it failed in my eyes to actually follow or develop a plot, and it paid little attention to the given topic
Drama Queen: you need to up your vocab, in places it felt like the piece was written by a 2yr old..unlike anxiety in ma eyes u fail to pull of the simplistic approach to language..imagery was well created and vivid, amd as with dimans, emotion poored out...ur structure was concise, precise and flawless..ur topic coverage wa son point...and ur drop foloowed n developed a stroyline..
PEace
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