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Old 05-04-05, 07:55 PM   #4
Dervla
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Alright, nice vocab. The flow was good. The emotion of this verse was Nice, and you add meta'z to make it better. The imaginary was good, using "as if" "like". I suggest to upp on your structure, but it was a nice peice. Keep writing.
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