this was decent,opener was worded a bit off thou
structures good, vocab was about average
wasnt feeling the closer like i shouldve thou...
it didnt make sense to me, hmm, dunno, maybe im tired..
i suggest using more imagery and express ya
emotion more, on a topic like this, your reader should
be infused with chills, that when you kno you've written
a good topical piece...especially if you get chills reading your own work
stay up thou, some improvement n you'll drop some nice stuff

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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
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fake fucks..move on...!