I didnt like your structure but i did like your syllable count. I think this would sound good on audio but it wasn't really a good read cause i can't feel the beat or the flow you're sayin' it to. also, it was short...real short. i also agree with kesse, i was feelin the second verse more than the first... not a bad drop tho...keep up

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2132560

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