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Old 05-06-05, 08:06 AM   #34
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Voted For: morse code

bah, both were weak

murdz...you really need to work on structure man, still stretching lines and it takes away from effectivness of punches, couple self-glore lines in there....attempted at being creative, some punches just came off as weak though....nothing really complex, everything was too simple and i didn't really enjoy reading your verse....keep up though

morse, umm, you had a few punches i laughed at, but a few that were totally whack....opener was good, cept for the set-up line which could have been worded a little better....some stuff you had good ideas, but poor ass wordplay fucked em up, really need to work on that....and vocab, both yall need to elevate with that....you two were basically tied in this, cept morse had better structure/flow and had a few better disses/more punches connected....so going off that....

v/morse code
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