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Old 05-09-05, 04:56 PM   #14
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Voted For: Young Blaze

it's clear who the winner is... Young Blaze the metaphors were too sick your verse was the most creative and hard hitting..

the "silence ya clique">"muting seat belts"
the Family Reunion line was sick
you had some multis that i was feeling.
the "scared to post" like "fence builders" near haunted house line was an OH MY GAWD line... creative with metaphors is always a plus, no played lines from what i saw.. the closer was good as well, just not as hard hitting as the first portion of your verse..

black queen your verse was pretty basic, with the metaphors and what not, nothing stood out as creative or a nice twist in your lines, you didn't come near as hard as you have in the past. the walk-man line is played tto death as well as the "dropping knowledge line" that's why i feel you lost, you had some played lines here and there, just work on coming with some more creative punchlines and if you do decide to use played concepts make a good twist at least...

this was one-sided however, winner = Young Blaze
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