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you know, the title had me really hesitant to come in here and read this, lmlo

but, this was actually a really cool piece, i could tell it was quick because there was alot of grammar errors, haha, but i wont count those

the story was very vivid, very real, and very emotional....very nice dictation here, i loved how you told the story, and let it unfurl....i can see you are a pretty good write, and i hope to see more from you.....

this piece overall, although quick, it was a really nice read, and i want to see what you can do when you put some effort into it...nah saying? haha, well keep up for sure

"I still hold memories, and everyday I cherish them, but it’s not the same before
The good things we did together, are bore. Cause you aren’t here to adore
I busted into tears, as I notice her face. Shockingly I said “Mom”
It had been so long, I’ve reached my arms out to her. My soul went calm"

just a couple lines that stood out, keep up, pz

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