aaaw this is really sad! lol

This seige of emotions like "water" takes me under,
I need some relese to wake up from this slumber,

Cause i feel like im downing,
This depressions got ma head under "water im drowing...."

^^^I like this water imagery its real good, plus those were great finishing lines.. lot of emotion goin on, structure does kinda help a poem tho, but urs was kinda erratic, kinda adds to the eratic feelings of depression and those thots!

I duno, jus what i think lol

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This is my sig. what?

I'm white so u KNOW i can't rap =)

I will definitely RTF if u leave a link, thanks!