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Old 05-13-05, 01:35 PM   #6
Kawn Flixx
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ahh , this was some amateur stuff
Structure , and flow were blah..
Punchlines were there but werent hitten very hard
next time on your structure dont end your lines with //
End then with ... or just leave it with out //
Overall keep it up, you have potential keep elevating and go into tutorials
your learn stuff
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