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IP:
This was a decent peice... could have been alot better
structure was killing me , it was all over the place
lines were stretched , You had nice vocab , but you
still need to elevate on wordplay , and worden
your bars so they dont come out stretched..
Also dont even your bars with .... and dont add all that excevise stuff
like those - - or '' .. just makes your verse look sloppy.
Overall keep it up , you have potential
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