very good
this was very engrossing...it got me then held me there...ur word were well placed casted pefectly thru most of the piece...i felt like i was reading a classick novel like
"on the road" by jack keruak(misspelled) or animal farm by eric blaire a.k.a. goerge orwell...what i mean is...u set the seen and by the end of it i had a vivid picture in my mind accompanied by a sobbering thought

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