View Single Post
Old 05-13-05, 05:55 PM   #10
DQ
Odi et Amo
 
DQ's Avatar
 
Posts: 3,675
From: Alosta City
IP:

Voted For: Aurora Sky

Ax Dogg

If there was sumtihn worst than my battle with Ca$per was your verse against this master
you gon be murdered faster and nastier than the shots on Ol' Dirty Bastard
^good opener

Before you rap about lips again make shure you take my tips my friend
For this to be intersting it will depend on how fast you wanna get to your end
^coo coo, no punch though

let me guess...... "you don't have a cadillac" and you think I will give a fuck about that
"then I will murder you with my mack" there is another topic of things you can rap
^okay bar

your verse against bonecollector was ntuhing but he's ugly and gots big lips
by ur nickname I bet you are a bitch that doesn't even have nice hips
^nice one

post ur picture too so I can laugh too..........
you a wack ass nigga and that's the true............
^bleh @ your closer

Okay verse, had some punches in there and personals as well. Flow was off here and there, vocab was good but try to get more creative and hardhitting punches in there next time. Everything was rather basic, you should've word some stuff in another way and you would've had an excellent punch. No hate...structure wasn't all that either and what was up with the closer?


Aurora Sky

You Gona Lose, you wack, its not cuz the people you battle its cuz the skill you lack/
^hehe, nice opener

This kids a punk, and he rightfully is, cuz his raps is wack like that site in his sig/
^coo coo

Son dont say you nice unless you are, and ya punches r like that guy in the box, cuz they wont get you far/
^hehe, funny

Between me and you, who's more crazy, messin wit me, ill leave ya with no teeth like a new born baby/
^lolz...okay line

Watch this fag get smothered, and ya name represents ya skill if you take away the x add an ass than add another/ (Ax-x+s+s=ASS)
^funny closer

Cool verse right here, got a different style of rhyming and building up your verse than more cats on this site. Good hardhitting punches, personal in closer , flow was good and structure was different but cool. Creativity was there, might be a bit better next time maybe...work on that...overall, good battle verse...
__________________


Authentik Intelligence





...The future is mine...

Send a message via AIM to DQ Send a message via MSN to DQ Send a message via Yahoo to DQ