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Old 05-14-05, 07:06 AM   #10
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Voted For: Daubs

JooKsta

im da type ta merk u when i spit-sir...and fightin imma SteeL-er like da team in pitts-burgh
^nice wordplay but it's self-glorification and no punch

ya verses dont hurt me,only make-me-laugh...plus ya flows is like Ciggerette Smoke they make-me-gag
^great line right here, again good wordplay formed into hard punch now

u's Trash similar ta the Stuff-0n-Tha-Curb...u Broke,i get Cash pitchin Stuff-0n-Tha-Curb(crack)
^cool closer

Overall good verse here, you definitely have your wordplay on lock. You have a somewhat different style than most cats on here but it doesn't affect your flow because I was feeling that. The vocabulary was good, structure is different but cool. Only hardhitting punch you had was the second line but I thought it was quite funny. You have potential for sure with the nice wordplay and such, just get more punches and personals out of it. Keep it up man!


Daubs

Bitch, you couldnt get a fuck if you rolled wit prossies and whores.....
Your such a pussy, even ya name is armoured ...........with underscores!
^hehe nice opener

Claim you poppin pills and shit, thats why in ya location your so high..
But couldnt be above me,............if you were a star up in the sky!!!!
^bit played line but still good personal

This joker couldnt drop hot if he were a card and fell on a heater..
Cant fuck wit ya set?.....i could, im an educational teacher!!!!!!!
^coo closer

Nice verse right here, had some good personals. Not always that high creativity in your lines but they did always hit quite hard in fact. Flow was good, maybe get some multies in there next time, pick up the pace you know. I felt this wasn't your top A game you brought, seen better from you but overall it was good. Structure was cool, found good balance in your vocabulary as well.

My vote goes to Daubs for having personals and hardhitting punches but JooKsta you got the potential for sure, keep at it man!
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